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Monday, May 21, 2012

This Haiku Pines May 21, 2012

More than a year now
and still the core pines for love
I sit here, unloved, undone.

Emptiness dulls it
beating core sounds mechanical
"you must emerge" it calls.

Love the unloved
pump in life and make it alive
the pining disappears.
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11 comments:

  1. Anu ~*~May 21, 2012 at 9:14 AM

    Lovely lines ...
    http://anu-dailypost.blogspot.in/2012/05/pine.html

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  2. JaskirancanvasMay 21, 2012 at 10:50 AM

    i can feel that very feeling... sailing in the same boat buddy...but pining could also inspire such bful words.. grt work..

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    1. Tarun MazumdarMay 21, 2012 at 6:51 PM

      Thank you Jas.. we would certainly sail through this.

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  3. GraceMay 21, 2012 at 4:12 PM

    Nice pining thoughts ~ Just a small suggestion though that in writing haiku, you must be concrete in your images, rather than in abstract like this:

    empty vase
    pining for flowers,
    one year now

    Hope you don't mind ~ Smiles ~

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    1. Tarun MazumdarMay 21, 2012 at 6:53 PM

      Thanks a lot Grace for the suggestion... duly noted.. :-) :-)

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  4. Jaideep RaoMay 22, 2012 at 11:21 PM

    Amamzingly brilliant Tarun,.This one is the best that I have read today!

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  5. Magical Mystical TeacherMay 23, 2012 at 4:43 PM

    New life, no pining--makes perfect sense!

    A Pining Peach

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  6. UnknownMay 24, 2012 at 10:40 AM

    Hmmm... I so understand this. We are all in the same league I think. Loneliness, perfectly expressed in words.

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